Good work MB, but I think we should remove:
"We're (clearly) not an aggressive/early rush civ "
I think that's a bit too much. "We hope this gesture shows our friendly intent and desire to cooperate." should be enough.
"fairly specific agreement with you regarding aggressive settlements"
Again, I think this sentence says "we're afraid, please don't hurt us"
We should be able to re-word it to something "we would be seriously pissed off if you plop your second city 4 tiles from our capital"
Also, I'd try to weave a question about their capital's whereabouts in the second paragraph, where we agree to share info. (even though we will have more of it) I'd really like to know how far away they are.
something at the end of the paragraph like: "btw, is your capital far from where our explorers met each other?"
"we'll meet civs faster and gather more information than those who start with warriors."
Any reason we couldn't change that to:
"we'll meet civs faster and gather more information than you."
For the rest I agree 100%
"We're (clearly) not an aggressive/early rush civ "
I think that's a bit too much. "We hope this gesture shows our friendly intent and desire to cooperate." should be enough.
"fairly specific agreement with you regarding aggressive settlements"
Again, I think this sentence says "we're afraid, please don't hurt us"
We should be able to re-word it to something "we would be seriously pissed off if you plop your second city 4 tiles from our capital"
Also, I'd try to weave a question about their capital's whereabouts in the second paragraph, where we agree to share info. (even though we will have more of it) I'd really like to know how far away they are.
something at the end of the paragraph like: "btw, is your capital far from where our explorers met each other?"
"we'll meet civs faster and gather more information than those who start with warriors."
Any reason we couldn't change that to:
"we'll meet civs faster and gather more information than you."
For the rest I agree 100%